Now then, part two of the miracle is that the first draft of "Mirror Man" is now complete and the editing proces began in earnest today.
With Christrmas fast approaching I'm not sure how far it will be progressed, but I'm on it and that is a significant milestone.
As the season seems to be well and truly upon us, I wish you all a very Merry Christmas and a healthy and happy 2008.
I sent my pitch for "Mirror Man" in to Bookends, LLC for a critique, a few weeks ago.
The response was not only very complimentary and encouraging - particularly as I'm now first-drafting the final chapter - but it gave me some invaluable pointers on how to polish it further and increase my chances of catching a prospective agent's attention.
The Pitch:
Valentine is a Child of Loki and one of the original Berserker tribesmen of Norse Folklore. With unobstructed access to the minds of his chosen victims and the ability to assume their precise physical characteristics, he takes what he wants, when and from where he pleases. He is the ultimate identity thief, unconstrained by the password-encrypted barriers his human counterparts face. Only a conscience and the inherent loneliness his immortality brings, stand between him and the decadent life of leisure lead by his brothers and sisters.
The Critique:
I love this! I really think this sounds cool. My only suggestion is not to let it dwindle out. Give us the conflict in the last sentence. What is this book about and what does Valentine face? I hope the book isn’t entirely an internal battle for Valentine on whether to use his powers or not. That would be boring. No, I want to know what he’s going to be up against in this book. If you can nail that last line you have an absolute winner here.
I'll get to work in that final sentence of the pitch soon, hopefully incorporating more specifics on the conflict.
Many thanks, Jessica!
